Had I a hammock white.....


Had I a hammock white,
To tie betwixt two palms.
I'd swing in it, all night.

What a night it would be!
Had I a hammock white,
Rocking to the sea's lullaby.

I'd swing in it all night,
With the cool seaside breeze,
Heaven on earth, alright!

By day in it, I'd snooze,
Had I a hammock white,
Left to me and my booze.

On a sunny afternoon, bright,
A lazy siesta it would be, then
I'd swing in it all night.

Oblivious to the world's lies and spite,
Surrounded only by beautiful blues,
Had I a hammock white,
I'd swing in it all night.


A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme: aba aba aba aba aba abaa. The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).

This Villanelle has been written for the Z-A in 26 days challenge at 'I Rhyme Without Reason'



Comments

Ruchira said…
Extremely well written Villanelle ! enjoyed it !
vibhutib said…
Thankyou Ruchira, am so glad you did. This was my first attempt and I was waiting for reactions..:D
Nanka said…
Wow!! Such a beautiful thought and it flows so well in your Villanelle!! You seem to have done it with great ease too :) Loved it and hope you find the time to rock yourself in a hammock doing all the wackiest things you have wished to do !!
vibhutib said…
LOL..Thankyou Nanka..I think the next time I get to Goa im going to buy myself a white hammock..then the hunt for the two palms shall begin..;)
vibhutib said…
LOL..Im going to Goa to get myself a white hammock and then the hunt for the twin palms begins..;)
Leo said…
I've to take out my old hammock n tie it up somewhere now! :D nice one.
Victoria said…
Bravo! Writing a Villanelle is no easy feat. Right now my hammock would be white with SNOW. Thanks for your kind comments on my blog.
Rumya said…
Hammock, Beach, Sand, Sun, Goa!!! Thats where you'd want to be heading.... ;)
Amity said…
Oh I would love to rest and read a good novel in that hammock, betwxt palm trees...overlooking the beautiful blue sea...:-)

LOvely Villanelle Vhibs...:-) You did so well here...I have Villanelles too, a couple or more... :-)
a new learning today - Villanelle !
How do you manage to compose these?!
Really Nice
Nighthawk said…
Like villanelles. This is a good one..clean, crisp, like the picture. Good write. Nighthawk
Jingle said…
perfect rhymes.
love the imagery, masterful job.

A++
fiveloaf said…
refreshing! mine's here- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/15/head/
Wow! Villanelle, I love this and also writing this.. One of the best forms of poems.. You did a great job... I enjoyed Vibz..

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