My first HAIKU

 Sleep my  baby,
Snugly in bed.
Sweet Dreams!
                                                                   

Comments

Vinay Leo R. said…
hey Vib, this was cute! :)
Oh Leo..U read it already? Thaks..Are you aware of Haiku?
Im wanting to learn the genre..:)
Vinay Leo R. said…
@Vib,
yeah, m aware.. its my second fav poetic form! :)

want me to teach what i kno? :D
Hey thats absolutely wonderful..And y the reluctance? go ahead pls..M all ears and eyes :D
Vinay Leo R. said…
ok.. reluctance was coz i'm the amateur poet. i might not know all ;) :D

anyways..
haiku, its of three lines..
its usually in a 5-7-5 syllable format, though some say it may vary.

syllable=pronunciation sound

eg. vibhuti is 3 syllable as its pronunced vi-bhu-ti

eg haiku maybe

vi-bhu-ti tried once
hai-ku on slee-ping ba-by
it came out so well

:)
So u do know it well Leo..
ur good ya...M n amateur too..So no worries at all..Thanks for sharing in detail..
now it gets clearer..
So is this right?
Slee-p My Ba-By (5)
Snu-g-ly i-n be-d (7)
Swee-t drea-m-s (5)
..I also read that 'ing' shouldn't be used..
Vinay Leo R. said…
@Vib,
not sure of the ing.. but i use it, and i've seen many haiku poets use it too..

and no..
urs gets split as

sleep my ba-by(4)
snug-ly in bed(4)
sweet dreams(2)
Is that so?
I still dont get the syllables bit..
:(
Anyways..time, more kind poets like urself & experience will teach and give me clarity, I suppose..
:)
Vinay Leo R. said…
@Vib,

hehe. the syllables are difficult at first.. ur right, only trying more can make u better..

and yeah, urs may/may not be haiku, but the words have their own magic. i found it so darn sweet.. :) esp the pic.
Thanks Leo..Thats very sweet of you.
The baby is of my son, the 1 day old abgel, when the pic was clicked..
Now he's a naughty little one year old...
Vinay Leo R. said…
@Vib,

he is an angel.. :) its nice to have met both of u :D :D
anyhow, if u have any poetic doubts, call upon me.. u've my blog address and ur followin it too i think :) will help any way i can :)

keep trying! :D
Tarun Mitra said…
this one is sweet
Hey Tarun thanks friend..:)
Neeraj Shinde said…
I am kinda not much familiar with this genre... but still I can feel the beauty of it... Very sweet! :-)

BTW have you ever tried 55 fictions?
Yes Neeraj, am learning too and another yes for the 55iers..Ive written a few in that genre. you'll find it under 55 fiction tag..:D
Thanks for the interest in my blog...Am obliged.:D
I am kinda not much familiar with this genre... but still I can feel the beauty of it... Very sweet! :-)

BTW have you ever tried 55 fictions?
Tarun Mitra said…
this one is sweet
Vibhuti B said…
Is that so?
I still dont get the syllables bit..
:(
Anyways..time, more kind poets like urself & experience will teach and give me clarity, I suppose..
:)

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